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Some people say that tourism has many negative effects on the countries that people travel to. How true is this statement? What can tourists do to reduce the harmful effects of tourism on local cultures and environments.

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In the resent day, many countries rely on touristry to ameliorate economy as Thailand, Singapore,...
Although
 the growth of quality of traveller can bring a lot of benefits to the rustic, it
also
 has a negative effect on the environment. I am personally convinced that holidaymakers still do many things to reduce their impact on nature and culture. Let begin with The disadvantages that travel could take to the country. In my professional opinion, one of the worst problems that tourism can cause is the loss of cultural identity and national character in the country that travellers visit.
For example
 on SaPa in my republic, nowadays, locals don’t want to wear their traditional costume because they saw holidaymakers wear modern clothing which is cheaper and more beautiful than their clothes. Other weakness of growth in the number of visitors is environmental pollution. Not of all but almost travellers don’t care about nature. They throw trash indiscriminately because it doesn’t affect them.
Thus
, I think the best way to reduce tourist’s collisions on the environment and local cultures is to enforce laws to fine people who sap environment.
For instance
, nowadays, The government in Việt Nam enforced the law that will fine from 300.000 VND to 500.000 VND for indiscriminate disposal. The other thing we can do is to put
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ubbish bin in everywhere that everybody can easier to throw trash. In conclusion,
although
 the growth of visitors brings many problems to countries, it is hard to deny the benefits that tourism takes to us. We should find ways to improve their advantages and decrease their effect.
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