Some Universities in less developed countries hire professors from well-known universities to improve the quality of education. Some believe that this is not a perfect solution and there are other ways to enhance the quality of education. DO you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, In Undeveloped countries,some
universities
employ distinguished
professors
from other elite
universities
to enhance the level of
education
. Some people think that
this
is an ideal
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to receive a high-quality
education
,
while
others, I included, argue that there are other approaches. Those who agree with hiring
professors
from prestigious
universities
believe that
this
is a shortcut. Rather than waiting for local
professors
to gain experience and become eminent, it is better to hire
professors
which
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have
PHDs
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Ph.D.s
and ISI articles and seminars from other
universities
.
This
will raise the
university
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knowledge level.
However
, Others argue that hiring well-known
professors
is expensive in the
least developed
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countries.it is not only about higher salaries but
also
the transportation and accommodation costs are considerable.
Therefore
,
universities
may charge the students or take a loan and if lucky find a generous benefactor.
Moreover
, there are other cheaper ways to achieve first-class
education
. One way is through distance learning and online classes with eminent
professors
which ultimately deliver satisfactory results. Another way is to send local
professors
to another high-ranked
university
.
This
is a permanent and long-term solution. These
professors
return to their
university
conveying the students and
share
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their new knowledge with other colleagues, enhancing
university
education
. In conclusion,
instead
of hiring skilled
professors
from famous
universities
,
the
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expensive idea, I recommend using cheaper methods which are using distance learning and sending
professors
aboard.
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