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Some Universities in less developed countries hire professors from well-known universities to improve the quality of education. Some believe that this is not a perfect solution and there are other ways to enhance the quality of education. DO you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, In Undeveloped countries,some
universities
 employ distinguished
professors
 from other elite
universities
 to enhance the level of
education
. Some people think that
this
 is an ideal
war
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way
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 to receive a high-quality
education
,
while
 others, I included, argue that there are other approaches. Those who agree with hiring
professors
 from prestigious
universities
 believe that
this
 is a shortcut. Rather than waiting for local
professors
 to gain experience and become eminent, it is better to hire
professors
which
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 have
PHDs
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Ph.D.s
 and ISI articles and seminars from other
universities
.
This
 will raise the
university
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 knowledge level.
However
, Others argue that hiring well-known
professors
 is expensive in the
least developed
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 countries.it is not only about higher salaries but
also
 the transportation and accommodation costs are considerable.
Therefore
,
universities
 may charge the students or take a loan and if lucky find a generous benefactor.
Moreover
, there are other cheaper ways to achieve first-class
education
. One way is through distance learning and online classes with eminent
professors
 which ultimately deliver satisfactory results. Another way is to send local
professors
 to another high-ranked
university
.
This
 is a permanent and long-term solution. These
professors
 return to their
university
 conveying the students and
share
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 their new knowledge with other colleagues, enhancing
university
education
. In conclusion,
instead
 of hiring skilled
professors
 from famous
universities
,
the
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an
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 expensive idea, I recommend using cheaper methods which are using distance learning and sending
professors
 aboard.
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