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People have historically attempted to achieve a perfect society. However, it is difficult to decide what a perfect society would be like. What would be the most important element of an ideal society? What can normal people do to make society more perfect?

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There is no doubt that people have been making an effort to have a perfect
society
. Even though It is hard to make a perfect
society
 It is important to consider what we can do to contribute to an ideal
society
. In
this
 essay, I will explain why, in my opinion, respect for the difference and
inclusion
 is an important element for a better
society
.
Firstly
, the most important element for a better
society
 is respect for the differences. The reason for
this
 is the fact that we have to get along with people who think and act differently than us,
thus
 people who came from a different culture. To illustrate,
last
 month my aunt got very upset because her coworker did not invite her to her birthday. When talking with her colleague, her friend explained to her that she does not have the custom to celebrate birthdays with friends, so she could understand her and keep the friendship
instead
 of becoming upset and putting her friend away. As result, If we could comprehend the differences between us and get along with it, we would have a better relationship.
Furthemore
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Furthermore
,
inclusion
 is essential for a more just and egalitarian
society
. As
a
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society
 is formed for every individual, there is no point in having some individuals apart from that. It is fundamental that we have action and facilities that benefit everyone.
Such
 as, social and racial program
inclusion
, opportunities for younger people, program support for
elderely
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elderly
, in order to make all individual active and feeling part of the
society
. In conclusion, to make a perfect
society
 is not an easy thing to do.
Although
 there are some key
element
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 that
are
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 essential for an ideal
society
,
such
 as respect for the difference and
inclusion
 program.
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