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People eat more processed food than they did in the past. Why is this? What are the effects of this?

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Nowadays, the habit of consuming processed
food
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 has increased considerably compared to many years ago. Among the reasons for
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 increase,it is worth mention the practicality associated with the convenience of these kinds of
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. Over the
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 decades, people started to spend less time in the kitchen preparing meals.
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, foods that are processed and ready to consume are usually more appealing. It works basically as a time-saving option for those who prefer a more convenient and fast manner of eating.
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, it is way easier to prepare a lasagna in the microwave, as it will take less than 10 minutes,
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 of doing it from scratch.
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 time-saving option will
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 prevent people from other activities that come with preparing their own
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, like doing the dishes and cleaning the floors.
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, convenience can have a high price when it comes to
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. Processed meals do not have all the proteins and vitamins required to maintain one’s
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, so people who have a diet resumed of junk and processed
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 will need to complement it taking vitamins in order to stay healthy. Other than that, these meals usually have
a high levels
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 of fat and salt, which can lead to even worse
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 problems,
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 as obesity and high blood pressure. An example of
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ood with a large amount of salt and fats is microwave popcorn,
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, you can buy corn kernels and pop them on the stove as a much healthier alternative. In conclusion,
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 processed
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 is probably more practical and convenient than healthy ones, in the long term it can evolve into serious
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 problems. With that said, it is highly recommended that people try to balance their diet for a better and longer healthy life.
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