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Some people believe that it is more important to teach children the literature of their own country than other countries. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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iterature of their own
country
 than other countries. I totally agree with the statement and the below essay will show why I believe that it is very necessary to teach our student about our history.
To begin
 with, whenever children are taught about our native history they will understand our culture, our way of living and rituals much better. By doing
this
 students will have more attachment to our provincial and will always be proud to be a citizen of the
country
.
For instance
, a study shows that whenever student shows interest in our own history they tend to do many better things for the county in the future. Mostly only these students join either defence or be a part of countries administration, so that
country
 can become better.
In addition
, whenever children are taught about our literature they try to adapt those things into their mind and they will keep the
country
 essence alive and carry forward to the upcoming generation.
For example
, we daily come across the news that in our rustic many years ago people used to have strong self-defence skill which is known to very few people now. All these changes happened because those skillsets were not carried forward and it's lost somewhere in the generations.
Finally
, to conclude if children are encouraged to read about our
country
 literature
then
 our
country
 legacy will be carried forward.
Also
, students can learn about our culture and they can improve the countries future by contributing to society.
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