Some people suggest that a country should try to produce all the food for its population and import as little food as possible. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, there is disagreement among people
whether
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about whether
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a country should produce all the food for its population or
import
it. I believe that it is not possible to produce all the goods we need with only a little
import
because it is really hard to have all raw
materials
and even if we can, it would be expensive. First of all, to manufacture all the goods for the population, we need raw
materials
, and some raw
materials
are hard to find or grow.
For instance
, assume that you live in a country where the sun does not penetrate enough. You will need sugarcane
for
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to
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produce sugar but sugarcane grows in warm places, and the temperature should be at least 22 degrees. In
this
situation, you cannot produce sugar which means you cannot produce sweet foods. There are many limitations like
this
and it is hard to solve all of them.
Secondly
,
although
there are many problems in obtaining all raw
materials
, there is always a solution. As I mentioned before sugarcane needs heat to grow up. In countries like England, artificial sun technology is used for sugar cane manufacturing, but it is not cheap technology. We can use new technological developments to fill all our gaps, but the cost will be too high. As money is a kind of limitation, we will have to
import
some of the raw
materials
.
Consequently
, I believe that it is not possible to produce all the goods even if we
import
some of the raw
materials
, I don't think that it will be enough.
However
, we can always use technology, the economic situation of the country is important for these kinds of productions because they are costly.
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task achievement
While your essay presents a clear position, try to elaborate more on your arguments. Provide additional points or counter-arguments to show a deeper analysis of the topic.
coherence cohesion
Make sure each paragraph logically follows from the one before it, to enhance the flow of ideas. Use transitional words and phrases to show the connections between ideas more clearly.
introduction conclusion present
The essay includes a clear introduction and a strong conclusion that effectively summarizes your position.
relevant specific examples
You have used a relevant example of sugarcane to support your argument, which makes your point more convincing.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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