It is expected that in the future old people are going to outnumber young people in many countries. Do you feel this is a positive or negative development?

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In many parts of the world, the ratio of older people to younger people is swelling.

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an older populace does pose a few benefits, it is felt that

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trend is more negative than positive in nature.

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will be shown by looking at how a large elderly population strains

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ublic’s health resources and deterred younger from having their own children.

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, the aged require extra attention from public health care services that may put pressure on

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ountry’s health services.

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Canadian increasingly depend on free public healthcare services which

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funded by taxpayers. As the number of people over sixty -five is increasing, the needs of medicine

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soaring and financing the needs of medicine is expected to put immense stress on

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conomy

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rowing number of seniors it is a negative phenomenon.

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, younger people mostly deterred of having their own children since they are responsible to take care of elder family member. statistics, in

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century, show that the birth rates in some countries, like japan

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have been dropped dramatically due to increasing the figure of aged citizen.

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in daycares young people couldn’t afford to have kids and simultaneously take care of their parents so it

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them to have newborn that it is not a positive change. As the above evidence shows, there are two prominent drawbacks because of outweighing the population of

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lderly in a society one is the burden on

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conomy and the other one can be decreasing of birthrate. Despite

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

279 words

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It is expected that in the future old people are going to outnumber young people in many countries. Do you feel this is a positive or negative development?

Include an introduction and conclusion

Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Write at least 250 words.

There is an increasing trend around the world of married couples deciding not to have children. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for couples who decide to do this.

Many people realize that people living in the 21st century generally have a better quality of lives than people born in earlier centuries. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people say that the best way to improve health is by increasing the number of health facilities.Others,However,say that this woud have little effect on public health and that other measure are required. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.