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People should follow the customs and traditions when people start to live in a new country. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In the modern busy life, there are a large number of immigrants who have been willing to have a comfortable life in other nations. Many advocate that people should conform to the local customs and traditions when they settle in a new
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. From my respective, I strongly agree with
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 idea because of some problems and benefits that people can face with them. There are two important reasons why newcomers should blend into the local culture in the host
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, the refusal to adapt to
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ost environment would create a cultural barrier for immigrants.
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 leads to social isolation, which has negative influences on people’s lives.
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, it is logical
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true that limited knowledge of local customs may result in some illegal actions in the host
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 and make local
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native people unpleased.
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, in Singapore, one of the cleanest countries in Asia, local residents consider anyone dirty and ill-mannered if they litter the street or spit gum in the public. Newcomers can gain some benefits if they adopt the customs and traditions of a new
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. One benefit is that if immigrants behave in accordance with the local norms, they will be accepted easily by local inhabitants, and
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, they can receive
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gain respects and affections as well as some help from the local.
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enterprises want to expand their production in a new
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, they must be aware of business practices there, which provides them with useful information to maximise profits. Another benefit is that newcomers might gain the richness of knowledge by virtue of the local customs and traditions, which enables them to actively participate in the activities of the community. In many festivals, people are able to participate
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join freely and feel harmonious like their own
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. In conclusion, I would argue that people who dwell in a new
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 should follow the customs and traditions which local people observe. 318 word

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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