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Some people believe that it is important to spend time developing a successful career. Others argue that it is more important to spend time with friends and family than at work. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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In
this
 era, it is noticed that spending a balanced life is very difficult because people have their own priorities. Some people want to prioritise
career
 development, so they give more
time
 to focus on their professional growth, and others want to spend quality
time
 with their family and friends and give them value over the
work
-life. I believe to manage the
time
 is difficult but not impossible; people should have to give
time
 to both essentials. On the one hand, usually, youngster young individuals give more importance to their
career
 growth over the family. Those people give more importance to their
career
 development do
this
 because they had a taste the struggle and hard
time
 watching theirs in terms of parents.
Therefore
, they prefer to spend
time
 on their workplace for their luxury life.
For example
, those youngsters want to spend more
time
 at their workplaces who as they want to have become rich and want to fulfil their dreams because they felt the pain of struggle.
Hence
 they dedicate extra hours, so they never go through what their parents did in the past.
On the other hand
, some people want to spend quality
time
 with their family and friends and make good memories, because nothing can replace d from family either whether it is
work
 or sports.
This
 is why these people
work
 normal 9 to 5 jobs, and receive monthly salaries sufficient for them to take care of their families, but
also
 have all the
time
 in the world to spend with them.
As a result
, they have
time
 to go on vacations, walks or simply enjoy game nights,
thus
 making memories.
For instance
, elderly people spend their
time
 with old pictures and memories which they spent with their love ones. In my opinion, young people should have to give priority to their love ones over the
work
 and make good memories for their old ages.
However
, giving them
time
 to business and the job is
also
 important because it provides a better lifestyle. In conclusion, it is a long debate with no answer.
However
, a successful
career
 and family both have their own values and both have their own significance. People should have to manage their
time
 equally and dedicate to their
work
 as well as their family.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Professional fulfillment
  • Work-life balance
  • Financial stability
  • Emotional support
  • Societal contribution
  • Professional identity
  • Creating memories
  • Flexible working hours
  • Remote work
  • Setting boundaries
  • Prioritizing tasks
  • Productive workforce
  • Societal well-being
  • Cultural norms
  • Overall happiness
  • Foundational relationships
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