You are working at an international company and recently your responsibilities have changed and you think more training is required. Write to your boss saying How your job has changed Describing the training you need Suggesting how training could be done efficiently

Dear Mr Smirnov, I am Mariya Vlassova from the cartographic department and have been working for our company as

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since 2016. Recently, I was promoted to the Head of the department with a crew of 30 people in it.

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, my load of responsibilities is significantly increased. Today, I am in charge of not only a couple of projects but

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I have to manage and coordinate all projects of the department, which requires great management

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. Even though I have all

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for my new role, after 2 weeks of my promotion I have realized that I am not particularly sure how to reduce

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of some important decisions that have to be made on a daily basis. In my opinion, it will be highly effective and useful if I attend a short intensive course in New York business school that was specially designed for acquiring management

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as risk assessment and decision-making

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. Thank you in advance for your attention to

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matter. Yours faithfully, Mariya V

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Nov 11, 2020

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