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Some people think that the governments should give financial support to artists, musicians and poets. Others think that it is a waste of money. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Nowadays, some people argue that the authorities should do the financial support to who is related to
art
 like, painters, actors’ poet and musicians. Others think that
government
 bodies should take care of them. I believe that the plethora of things which can be improved by investing in the
art
 sector. On the one hand, giving financial support to an artist from the
government
 can be beneficial for the
country
 because the artist is only a person who represents the
country
 with low inputs and obtains huge outcomes.
Furthermore
, the economy of the
country
 will grow because the local
art
 their cultural values and which attract foreign people.
Hence
, the tourism industry will boost.
For example
, the Pakistan
government
 encourage filmmakers for making drams and films which shows how beautiful
this
country
 which helps in the increase in tourism.
On the other hand
, there are some people who have an opposite viewpoint and they think that the
government
 should spend money on other issues and provide basic necessities to their residents
such
 as drinkable water, education and health care,
instead
 of invest on artists.
In addition
, especially those developing countries should give more importance to economic growth and reduce crime and terrorist activities.
For instance
, African countries have a high crime rate and they spend a huge part of the budget on security and decline crime rate. I think the
government
 should promote an artist and their
art
 because they give benefits in long terms and they the artists play a vital role for the
country
’s economic stabilization and build a relation to other countries by sharing cultural value. In conclusion, the financial aid to artists is necessary by authorities is a kind of appreciation and
also
 long term benefits for the
country
 in term of cultural trade with other countries.
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