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Many students find it harder to study when they are at university or college than when they were at school. Why is this? What can be done to solve the problem?

#students #study #university #college #school
Nowadays, many
students
 think that studying in
university
 or college is more difficult than in primary
school
,
middle
school
 and high
school
. I think there are several reasons for
this
phenomena
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.
And
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this
 problem is easy to solve. The first reason is
that
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apply
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the difference
of
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in
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 the study
content
 between
school
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schools
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 and
university
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universities
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.
Student'
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Students'
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 s
courses
 in primary and
middle
 schools are all
very
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 simple and basic knowledge.
For example
, in
middle
school
 maths, I learned some polynomial
calculate
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 and some simple application questions. In high
school
, the
content
 is on the basis of
middle
school
, more difficulties and more
courses
 would be set up,
such
 as chemistry and physics.
However
, there will be more difficult applications and research studies in universities.The second point is that the teacher's teaching way is different. Teachers usually encourage and push
students
 to learn at
school
. There are many rules, which can
promote
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students
 to study hard. But in
university
, professors only teach the
content
. They don't care about the process, only care about the result. It will lead to many less self-control
students
 not
study
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 hard and cannot be able to get credits and graduate successfully.
However
, there are some methods to solve these difficulties. As the Internet becomes more and more developed, there are more ways for people to get knowledge. If
students
 think the
content
 of
university
courses
 is difficult, they can learn through some websites,
such
 as the Chinese website
bilibili
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,
they
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 can find a lot of course explanations
in
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it
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. In
university
, there are not so many rules, so if
students
 don't know what the professor says, they can ask the professor or classmates directly in class. I believe they will answer.
Although
 the
university
courses
 are very difficult, and the professor is not as good as the teacher. I believe by using these methods,
students
 can graduate successfully from
university
 or college and have a good experience.In the future, science and technology will be more developed, it will bring more help to
university
students
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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