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Modern technology has being used more and more in different aspects of our lives, such as education. Do the advantages of using technology as an educational tool outweigh its disadvantages?

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The use of technology has been spiking up over the
last
 decade all over the world. Technological influence can even be seen in the classroom.
Although
 it possesses both pros and cons, I believe its benefits outweigh the drawbacks. I shall draw upon a few illustrations that reveal both the aspects of
this
 phenomenon.
Firstly
, some rather obvious advantages of using technology as an educational instrument can be found. One of them is its ability to engage students with various interactive learning resources
such
 as audiovisual representations, smartboards, etc.
Additionally
, its endless array of informational resources stand remarkable in the present educational system. Above all, today's online teaching with the advent of the internet has become popularly trending with the enormous benefits that it has brought in.
For instance
, Online learning has come to our rescue during the coronavirus pandemic situation. With
this
, students do not need to suffer from losing their academic years.
Nevertheless
, on the downside of the matter, some negative aspects should be pondered as well.
To begin
 with, automation can be quite distracting. At a young age, it is highly possible to lose focus with the online adverts and windows pop-ups during studies. To illustrate, the recent New York educational research found that 70% of the teenagers are suffering withholding their attention spans for a minute on anything.
This
 is the consequence of online learning.
Furthermore
, the rate of children suffering from optometric diseases has been increasing due to the over-exposure to the screen and thereby leads to sleeplessness, which is highly detrimental among children. All in all, it can be seen that the application of tools in schools can be beneficial for students.
However
, the merits of technological usage undoubtedly outweigh the demerits by wisely leveraging it.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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