Some people think that zoos are cruel and should be closed down. Others, however, believe that zoos can be useful in protecting wild animals. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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The opinion is divided on the existence of zoos and rights of wild animals, where one group believes animals should not be kept hostage in zoos, others are convinced that monitored spaces for animals would protect them from illegal hunting.

This

essay will discuss both views and will shed light on my opinion in conclusion.

To begin

with, Zoos could provide a safe haven to many exotic animals like a white tiger to be saved from hunters. Rare animals are prone to black mafia's trading for their skins which are used in making leather bags.

For example

, an expensive Hermes bag made from a crocodile is sold for thousands of dollars, which is made by sacrificing their lives.

Thus

, these natural reserves can protect these animals.

In addition

, these places can provide care for many sick animals and provide them

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proper attention during their end days.

for example

, if an animal gets sicks, zoos provide vets for them to take care of them.

Thus

, providing them with proper care for them. Well

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on the other hand

, many of times animals in

this

captivity can be very cruel towards them.

For instance

, Elephants kept in Thailand reservoirs are often criticized by animal rights organizations for their abuse on them. The teeth are removed and sold on the black market.

Similarly

, many animals lives are forced to stay in small cages, which is very different from their natural habitats.

For example

, a lion kept in cages can affect its mental health. Many organizations have come in support to preserve the animal's natural environment and let them live in wild. To conclude, after discussing both views I believe some wild animals should be kept in their jungles rather than caged down in small spaces like zoos, though it can provide them protection from hunter it has a negative impact on their mental health.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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8Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

309 words

7.50

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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animal welfare
conservation
captive breeding
habitat
ethical issues
zoochosis
endangered species
genetic diversity
reintroduction programs
wildlife education
sanctuary
natural living conditions
artificial environments
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