Some people think that zoos are cruel and should be closed down. Others, however, believe that zoos can be useful in protecting wild animals. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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The opinion is divided on the existence of zoos and rights of wild animals, where one group believes animals should not be kept hostage in zoos, others are convinced that monitored spaces for animals would protect them from illegal hunting.
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with, Zoos could provide a safe haven to many exotic animals like a white tiger to be saved from hunters. Rare animals are prone to black mafia's trading for their skins which are used in making leather bags.
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, an expensive Hermes bag made from a crocodile is sold for thousands of dollars, which is made by sacrificing their lives.
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, these natural reserves can protect these animals.
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, these places can provide care for many sick animals and provide them
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proper attention during their end days.
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, if an animal gets sicks, zoos provide vets for them to take care of them.
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, providing them with proper care for them. Well
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on the other hand
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, many of times animals in
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captivity can be very cruel towards them.
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, Elephants kept in Thailand reservoirs are often criticized by animal rights organizations for their abuse on them. The teeth are removed and sold on the black market.
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, many animals lives are forced to stay in small cages, which is very different from their natural habitats.
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, a lion kept in cages can affect its mental health. Many organizations have come in support to preserve the animal's natural environment and let them live in wild. To conclude, after discussing both views I believe some wild animals should be kept in their jungles rather than caged down in small spaces like zoos, though it can provide them protection from hunter it has a negative impact on their mental health.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • animal welfare
  • conservation
  • captive breeding
  • habitat
  • ethical issues
  • zoochosis
  • endangered species
  • genetic diversity
  • reintroduction programs
  • wildlife education
  • sanctuary
  • natural living conditions
  • artificial environments
  • behavioral enrichment
  • ecosystem
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