Topic: The environmental problems that today's world is facing are so great that there is little ordinary people can do to improve the situation. So government and large organizations should be responsible for reducing the amount of damage being done to the environment. The what extent do you agreed or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.
The environmental issues, nowadays, have become increasingly to serve, leading to widespread concerns. Many argue that the efforts of regular
people
are insufficient to address the problems
. Others say that only the government
and large firms have the power to be responsible for tackling the problems
. I partially agree with this
viewpoint. I think that both individuals and larger organizations have a crucial role to play in addressing environmental problems
.
First and foremost, the government
and larger entities have the power and resources to make a significant change. The government
has the authority to transform the environment for be better by implementing the transportation systems in the country. For example
, importing EV vehicles to run on city streets rather than using petrol cars. With this
change, carbon emissions have decreased in the air. The more we reduce carbon dioxide, the more we save the earth. On the other hand
, large corporations have the biggest to lead a huge change. They can transform their business models to be sustainable companies, that are protecting the environment by reducing carbon footprints and developing eco-friendly products. For instance
, Tesla company has produced a majority of electric car models.
However
, some believe that ordinary people
can’t make any further
changes. In contrast
, individual actions are a part of a thousand changes because people
live in a world, with a thousand million people
where there is rising awareness of environmental issues and comprehensive ways to protect it, such
as using public transportation, and understanding how to recycle wastes. Consequently
, this
led to the biggest improvement.
To conclude
, some people
believe that normal people
cannot help the environment; only the government
and larger companies can solve these problems
, however
, I believe that both of them have led a remarkable achievement. By transforming the public transport systems, involving sustainable ideas, and individual actions.Submitted by Date
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Your essay structure includes an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion, which is very effective.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.
‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.
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I really want to study but I’m too tired.
I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.
If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.