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Some people believe that the experiences children have before they go to school will have the greatest effect on their future life. Others argue that experiences gained when they are teenagers have a bigger influence. Discuss both views and give your own opinions.

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education
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 debatable. Though some individuals believe, start learning before
school
 is crucial while others believe, the
study
 at
school
 has more importance in their
life
. In my opinion, we should maintain a strong balance between two aspects which leads us to a better future.
This
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ome is
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ust for
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 before moving to
school
.
This
 knowledge would help them to understand more in the class.
Moreover
, early
education
 can help them to gain more advantages compared to others.
For example
,
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recent research on
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roup of 100
school
 students in the UK shows, scholars with pre-
school
education
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 high marks compared to those who do not get any early
education
. Scientists say in our
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early-stage
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stage
 the human brain is more prone to learn new things, so it is always better to start
study
 in
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arly
stage
 of
life
.
However
, excess academic pressure in
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the
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arly
stage
 may bring some complications.
On the other hand
, many people believe, experience in adolescent time is more important because
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hild can understand more during
this
stage
 of
life
.
For instance
, in a survey in Australia, it has been captured that creativity along with complex analytical power developed more in
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eenage
stage
.
Furthermore
, teenage time is very crucial for choosing
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arrier path, so obviously, future success totally depends on their experience in teenage
life
.
However
,
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ack of understanding can rises among adolescent because of the basic
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language
 concepts. Reports
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 lack of
study
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early-stage
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e
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the
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arly
stage
 can cause serious issues in future. In conclusion, I personally think,
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eaningful balance between both two above mentioned aspects
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 required for
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uccessful carrier. Neither lots of
study
 nor no
study
 is recommended for
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children. Clear thinking and
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good strategy can
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into
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 success.
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