In the modern world it is possible to shop, work and communicate with people via internet and live with any face to face contact with others.is it a positive or negative development in your opinion. To what extent do you support this development.

We know that today we can do a
lot
of things using the
internet
, buy food, work and talk to
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amily. For many people,
this
new way of life is good,
although
, others think that
use
apps to do everything is dangerous. In my opinion, I think that
internet
came to make our lives easy, and because of
this
it is extremely necessary, but at the same time, it can improve a
lot
of problems related with security and health. Nowadays, the
use
of smartphones to make friends, shopping and work is a reality, it means that it is
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ight against technology.
This
idea can be support by the argument that when we
use
phones to do things like these, we can have extra time to do others activities, because, it is a fact, the
internet
makes everything fast. The series “Connection”,
for example
, illustrate
this
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when showing the positive change that the
internet
has been bringing to us until now. One the other hand, we have to consider the fact that when we
use
just the
internet
to interact, buy things and do our obligations from
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ob, we can forget the benefits of walk on the streets and talk face to face. Another problem connected with
this
excessive
use
is that we can put important information on some sites that can be stolen. We can see
this
,
for example
, in other series called “Black Mirror”, that shows a
lot
of dangerous which are involves when we
use
the
internet
to do everything.
In addition
, it’s common to see people who are addicted to
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nternet in hospitals, they are,
for instance
, always with issues in their back and eyes. To conclude, we know that the
internet
is a reality and can make a
lot
of things better, but I defend
that is
hardly necessary to balance our relationship with her, especially because we can have some health problems and put our life in danger.
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