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Global warming is one of the biggest threats humans face in the 21st Century and sea levels are continuing to rise at alarming rates. What problems are associated with this and what are some possible solutions.

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Climate change has become one of the most phenomenon challenges to all species on the
earth
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0th Century. Due to
this
, the level of seas has continually been increasing in most parts of the world.
This
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 show the main negative impacts which
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flood
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warmer
earth
.
Then
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ecessary ways to deal with the difficulty. The foremost problems that make millions of people become homeless and hungry are
flood
 and climate change. When the amount of
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reenhouse effect gets bigger.
As a result
, it makes the layer of ozone thinner and thinner.
Therefore
, the temperature of the
earth
 rises and the ice in polar melts rapidly, which take the home of millions
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people in over the world. Climate change
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also
 responsible for food security and epidemic diseases. For
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instant, thousands of house and about fifty citizens were taken away in the latest
flood
. It is a real sorrow for all Vietnamese. A possible solution to
this
 problem would be saving energy. When we all cut down on using electricity, cutting trees, burning fossil fuel and deforestation, there will be less Co2 emission and
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reenhouse effect, that means we help to slow down the rise of heat on the
earth
.
Furthermore
, authorities should act to help the victims of
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atural disaster
such
 as
flood
 and tsunami soon be back to normal lives.
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also
 make a long term plan to minimize
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wful impacts of these issues. To conclude, the rising of sea label caused by increasing global temperature is the most difficult challenges that we are facing and
this
 will lead to the loss of many places, and suitable solution should be taken immediately.
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