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To what extent has the internet made life more convenient.

#internet #life
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It can not be denied that
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nternet has huge effects in either direct or indirect ways ; the
internet
 has made life more convenient in various parts,
for example
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education and communication.
Although
 the advantages outweigh
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isadvantages, there are some problems that sometimes occur,
such
 as security and privacy.
First
 of all, online classes are one of the main reasons why
internet
 made life better. Online classes help
wasting
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 less time with traffic and avoid face-to-face class for health safety reason. The assignments can be given and set automatically by teachers, and students can manage their time and send it through
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latform,
such
 as google classroom, without touching the worksheet paper.
Therefore
,
internet
 help not only
reduce
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 time with traffic but
also
 save health safety.
Moreover
, there are many social
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media
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medias
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 nowadays that can improve communication between people,
for example
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instagram
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 and
twitter
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. Every part of the world is connected. You can text your fellow from the far continent through the application with
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nternet. Without waiting for envelope or meeting face-to-face, you can communicate and get the information as soon as possible.
Hoewever
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However
, the problem
also
 occurs during
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usage. The crucial points are privacy and security. There are many hackers on the
internet
. All you need to do is do not
shaare
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share
 your personal information. In conclusion, the
internet
 made life better and more convenient in terms of education and communication, but you need to
becareful
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be careful
 about your privacy and security.
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