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It is sometimes suggested that primary school children should learn how to grow vegetables and keep animals. Do you think that the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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People sometimes make a suggestion that elementary school children ought to learn how to raise vegetables and nurture animals.
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 with, young children can be positively influenced if they raise other lives. Generally, children can be diligent with a
pet
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 animal. Many doctors say raising a
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 is good fort he kid's attitude. They learn responsibilities while they feed and wash animals.
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, kids can be neat and calm while they grow vegetables. Generally
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kids play around and make a loud noise because it is their nature, but raising vegetable can help them change their attitude. Many studies show children growing a vegetable have a sincere and honest mind.
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, a
pet
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 can be extremely hazardous to children. According to internet news, there was an accident in our society. A dog bites a kid until he is dead. The same incident happened to an adult.
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, people spend too much money on taking care of animals. Some people who love animals are bankrupt because they raise many animals. The cost of treatment by a hospital is
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 very expensive. If there are vegetables and crops near a house, the individuals suffer from insects and smell. Many people hate insects like a monster. In conclusion, raising animal has many advantages for children, while it can be a horrible monster to other people.
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, parents must teach young children how to control and manage the
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, they should have responsibility for it. The Government
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 regulates and legislates laws not to happen accident by pets.
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