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Beauty is in the eyes of the beholder.’ What do you think this means? Do you agree with this statement?

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Beauty
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 is dependent on individual perspectives. I agree with
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 statement and will state the reasons below.
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 with, people can not define
a
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bsolute
beauty
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 of anything.
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, how do you feel when you see Monariza in the museum? Some
of
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p
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eople say she is so beautiful but the others answer she is not. Like
this
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 drawing, we can adapt
this
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 to animal or human. Even though people see the same animal, they have different thoughts. In the case of people, the result will be various.
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, the standard of
beauty
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 has been changed in history. A long time ago, the fatter women are, the more
beautiul
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beautiful
 they are.
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,
beauty
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 in modern society is different from the old. They prefer to be slim to look beautiful.
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,
beauty
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 differs between countries or regions.
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, some men in the
philippines
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 like women who are
extremly
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extremely
 fat, while women having
l
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ong neck is pretty in some tribes in the
africa
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. Many human researchers say people have different opinions depending on the environment. In
the
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 poor country like the
philippines
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, they like fat women because they think
the
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women are rich which is
a
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prejudice.
Beauty
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 is dependent on
their
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its
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 environment and jobs. Sports players like some women muscular. If you are working in
a
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racing, the girls who
is
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 in a good shape is beautiful. In conclusion, Nobody can define absolute
beauty
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 in any situation, because it differs by
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nvironment or other reasons.
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, people do not need to worry about their
apperance
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appearance
, because they can be beautiful or handsome in some other circumstance.
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