IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 5.5

Environmental problem such as pollution and climate variations are increasing now days. The government have taken measures at global level but they got only few solution. why is it so? and how can this problem be solved?

Environmental issues have soared over
the
Remove the article
apply
show examples
recent years. The governments have taken measures but they are based on weak agreements, as a consequence, the world needs to trust
on
Verify preposition usage
apply
show examples
sciencie
Correct your spelling
science
 rather than politics to create new ways to provide clean
energy
Use synonyms
.
First
Linking Words
 of all, politicians have tried to solve
c
Add an article
the
show examples
limate change crisis by leveraging on weak political agreements for more than one decade.
For instance
Linking Words
, many countries
in
Verify preposition usage
apply
show examples
all over the world joined
to
Verify preposition usage
apply
show examples
the Rio de Janeiro agreement. In order to reduce carbon emissions, countries signed an agreement to do it, but they never gave details
Verify preposition usage
about
on
show examples
how they could have measured the potential reduction to make the policy a reality. Unfortunately, environmental damage is still increasing over time and the roots of the problem are still there.
Thus
Linking Words
, the world needs to find new clean and efficient methods to provide
energy
Use synonyms
.
As a result
Linking Words
, countries need to invest heavily
on
Verify preposition usage
in
show examples
 science rather than reinforce political solutions. By doing
this
Linking Words
, new
energy
Use synonyms
 solutions can be researched and
then
Linking Words
 founded to provide
realiable
Correct your spelling
reliable
energy
Use synonyms
 supply. For many years, our societies have used
fussil
Correct your spelling
fossil
 fuels to supply
energy
Use synonyms
 to create our product and services. Despite that
this
Linking Words
energy
Use synonyms
 helped us to
growth
Replace the word
grow
show examples
 and it is
realiable
Correct your spelling
reliable
 and cheap to produce,
this
Linking Words
energy
Use synonyms
 has created many environmental problems. Solar and wind
energy
Use synonyms
 have increased their efficiency, but they are still not reliable and cheap as
fussil
Correct your spelling
fossil
 fuels are. In conclusions, Despite many political efforts to solve
e
Add an article
the
show examples
nvironmental crisis, weaknesses on the agreements signed by
poiticians
Correct your spelling
politicians
 have not solved the problem.
Thus
Linking Words
, the solution is to increase investments
on
Verify preposition usage
in
show examples
 science to create new ways to provide clean and reliable
energy
Use synonyms
.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »- a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: