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Compare and contrast electronic media with print media.

#contrast #media #print
Everyone update themselves with
the
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current affairs and other
news
 through different medium and e-
media
 and conventional paper are the most popular.
This
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the
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source
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 of information based on their accessibility, expense and authenticity. To commence with, nowadays, with the advancement of technology people can access any information at their fingertips. there are many reasons for it. First and foremost, the invention of the smartphone has not only attracted to the society but
also
 made them dependent on it. Because it is easily available and
that is
 too at affordable price.
Similarly
, the internet made these devices
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 powerful that individuals can communicate with each other regardless of their location and can exchange information through social
media
 platforms
such
 as Facebook, Instagram, Whatsapp and many more which can not be possible to
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 through a newspaper. To cite an example, there are many online pages available where we can see updated
news
 and
also
 get a notification if anything new
posted
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;
while
 in print
media
,we get all updated
news
 on the
next
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day of the occurrence of the event.
This
 is the main reason why electronic
media
 is gaining popularity all over the world.
Apart from
this
,
hence
, we can see all
news
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in
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the
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electronic
device
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devices
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, we can search
and
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 find it very conveniently. So, we do not need to waste our time
in
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searching
it
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;
whereas
 it is difficult to find the
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 conventional daily.
However
, it is difficult to use mobile phones for elderly people as they are not tech-savvy they generally prefer to read the newspaper than its counterpart.
To conclude
, everyone is inclined towards
the
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electronic
media
 because of its several benefits
than
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 print
media
, albeit, retired people prefer
press
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 because they are not able to handle electronic devices properly.
Submitted by Neel Patel on

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task response
Ensure that your essay fully addresses the prompt and discusses both electronic and print media in a balanced manner.
coherence and cohesion
Organize your ideas in a more structured and logical manner. Use paragraphs to separate different points and provide a clear introduction and conclusion.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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