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Smoking not only harms the smoker, but also those who are nearby. Therefore, smoking should be banned in public places. To what extent do you agree?

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It is universally accepted that smoking is a bad habit and it has damaging effects on one's health. It just not harm the person smoking, but it
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 affects the person around them, and it should be completely banned in public areas. I utterly agree with
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 passive smoking is 10 times worst than actual smoking. People who live with a smoker tend to develop numerous breathing issues.
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, a non-smoker surrounds himself with smoker friends are more prone to develop asthma, among other lungs issues.
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, cigarettes pollute the environment, it creates a pungent smell which is unpleasant to many. It
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, general public smoking habits contributes the maximum percentage to their air pollution.
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, there is another group that believes banning smoking will be a bit harsh. Many only get a place to smoke,which is out of their house in
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overnment banned public smoking, many citizens were against the banned, and requested the government to uplift the banned as it was causing trouble to many. But, To keep our environment clean and maintain good air quality, smoking should be banned in public places. People should be mindful of their surroundings, as there are children and elder people, who can be directly affected by the smoke. To conclude, I reinstate my opinion that smoking should be completely banned in general public areas to make our environment safer and healthier.
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