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Some people claim than not enough of the waste from homes is recycled. They say that the only way to increase recycling is for governments to make it a legal requirement. To what extent do you think laws are needed to make people recycle more of their waste?

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Many individuals argue that we are not recycling an adequate amount of
waste
. They
also
 provide the view that, to raise the recycling rate it is essential for governments to make
people
 legally required to participate. In my opinion legislation is not necessary at all. It is my view that,
instead
 of passing some
laws
 to compel
people
 to recycle, we should raise public awareness about environmental issues and encourage
people
 to recycle more of their household
waste
. I believe, children from an early age must be taught to recycle and reuse useful materials and companies should
also
 make goods that
last
 longer.
Moreover
, we should reduce the amount of
waste
 we produce which is a result of our consumer culture.
For example
, if something in our house breaks, we throw it away and buy a new one
instead
 of repairing it.
In contrast
, some
people
 claim that governments should be stricter about
waste
 recycled by
people
. They firmly insist that authorities should put legal limits on recycling,
otherwise
,
people
 will not care enough about the consequences of
waste
 problems.
However
, I do not find
this
 argument convincing because there is evidence that if
people
 are obliged to do something they will find some way to avoid it,
therefore
,
laws
 are not a convenient way to address
this
 issue. From a social standpoint, encouraging
people
 by involving them in cultural and environmental activities would be more effective than forcing them to recycle by strict
laws
. In conclusion, I completely disagree with requiring
people
 to recycle by some
laws
 regarded to it because it is an undeniable fact that
people
 will not appreciate compulsion and raising their awareness about recycling will definitely be more efficacious.
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task response
Your introduction clearly states your opinion. However, it can be made stronger by briefly outlining the main points that will be discussed in the essay.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence and that the ideas flow smoothly. Transitions between paragraphs are generally good but can be improved for better coherence.
task response
Your points are clear and generally well-developed. Including more specific examples and evidence will strengthen your arguments.
coherence and cohesion
Try to provide more linkage words and cohesive devices to make the connections between your ideas more explicit, which will improve overall readability.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a solid structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
task response
You have provided a complete response to the task with relevant points about both the necessity of laws and alternative solutions.
task response
Your ideas are clear and presented in a logical order.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Waste management
  • Recycling
  • Sustainability
  • Mandatory
  • Voluntary
  • Legislative measures
  • Environmental impact
  • Public awareness
  • Regulation
  • Sanctions
  • Compliance
  • Recycling facilities
  • Consumer behavior
  • Waste reduction
  • Resource conservation
  • Circular economy
  • Eco-friendly
  • Biodegradable
  • Landfill
  • Global initiative
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