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Companies should avoid recruiting young women who have not started a family yet as they may be required to pay for their maternity leave later on. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Currently, young single women are believed to be avoided in hiring on a job as the
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 may be obliged to pay them
maternity
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 leave payments in the future. While
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 does cause inconveniences to the
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, I am convinced that
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 is a chauvinistic tendency and should not be supported. On the one hand, when hiring an unmarried
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 a
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 may face a search for a new employee, as well as additional expenses in the future. I think that
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 situation is not profitable, in the sense that a
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 will need to finance a search
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 a new worker and provide them with a reasonable salary. Albeit a new employee will substitute
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 on
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 leave, he still will be in need to be informed and trained how to work in
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 and how to deal with colleagues.
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ompany’s financial department will deal with rearrangement of finances and all additional expenses connected with a new worker.
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, all these procedures do become a highly time-consuming and expensive experience for a
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.
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, marking out mentioned above women from other job-seekers may be considered as a breaking of human rights. Apart from young women, who may take
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 leave,
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, in modern society, a young man could ask for
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paternity pay and will stay at home helping his wife with a newborn. That makes chances of facing financial inconveniences for a
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 equally the same as for hiring a young man or a young
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.
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, a young
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 could be a childfree person in
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ense that she is never going to have children at all,
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, it makes no sense of
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gender discrimination. For that reason, marking off women in
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 a way may cause issues for a
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 for
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 kind of a chauvinistic policy. To conclude,
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ompany’s policy against hiring young women these days may be considered as
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gender inequality. While a
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 may face additional and unplanned expenses with searching and recruiting a replacement for a
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 on
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 leave, I believe, that
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hildfree person or a young man may ask for paternity leave.
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