Many researchers believe that we can now study the behavior of children to see if they will grow up to be criminals, while others disagree. To what extent do you think crime is determined by genetics? Is it possible to stop children from growing up to be criminals?

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robability of turning into criminals. Some section of people

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with scholars on their research. I

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there is no direct relation between crimes and children's genes. To the best of my knowledge, we cannot be able to contain

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to become criminals. On the one hand, scientists believe in

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how the

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part of the crime.

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can predict and determine how children minds will react to different possible situations, aids them to predict

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extensive study on different patterns and possibilities.

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various influencing factors

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aggressiveness

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reasons for children to commit crimes .

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to the crimes

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or studies shows about genes plays a vital role in cultivating criminal

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arly age, which will

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them to think against crimes.

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Many researchers believe that we can now study the behavior of children to see if they will grow up to be criminals, while others disagree. To what extent do you think crime is determined by genetics? Is it possible to stop children from growing up to be criminals?

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

Nowadays，young people are admiring media and sports stars, even though they do not set a good example. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

People have little understanding of the importance of the natural world. What are the reasons for this and how can people learn more about the natural world?

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Families who send their children to private schools should not be required to pay taxes that support the state education system. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?