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Some people think sending criminals to prison is not an effective way to deal with them. Education and training are better. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Many argue
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 is not an effective punishment, governments should sent criminals to rehabilitation centres.
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 method, will opine my opinion in conclusion.
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 with, statics shows that people who go to jail for petty crimes are more likely to commit another
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 within a few days of release.
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riminal record
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 issued under their name, which makes it difficult for them to get any job.
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, in America, many African-American young adults who went to juvenile
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 for smaller crimes like a street fight and so on
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 has later committed
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igger
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 after release from the
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 due to lack of jobs and acceptance from the society. Everyone deserves a
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 chance, especially
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-time offenders who have been charged with small-degree crimes. Rehabilitation centres will help to acknowledge their mistake and rectify it. In my opinion, it is the best way to prevent people from committing a
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 in future. These facilities
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 provide job opportunities for reformed criminals, which helps them to turn around their lives. But having said that these facilities will only be effective for people who are willing to change their lives and want to become an honest citizen. A person who has a history of committing crimes is not going to alter his behaviour regardless of all the training and education. They deserve to be in jail to make our society a safer place for our country. To conclude, I firmly believe that educational centres are a better alternative to
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ne-time offender, but a criminal with
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ong history of
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 need to be in jail.
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