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In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. What is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

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Despite the fact that modern technology used in agriculture greatly improve efficiency and volume of
food
 products, there are still places in the
world
, where famine is still a serious issue.
This
 essay elaborates the case with
this
 discrepancy between the development of technologies in agriculture and conditions of
food
 shortages in some countries and proposes a solution to the
problem
.
First
 of all, considering the level of development of technologies used in agriculture, it is needed to be taken into account that poor developing countries that struggle with
food
 supply cannot afford to implement
last
 innovations.
In other words
, all technology advances benefit developed and rich countries, while developing countries do not have resources to implement modern technologies.
Furthermore
,
this
 case becomes worse
food
 produced in developing poor countries cannot meet demand due to substantial population growth.
Moreover
, many goods that are produced in developing countries have low quality and are not nutritious enough, so malnutrition and other illnesses connected to unhealthy ratio are still a
problem
.
Although
 a
problem
 is that many people around the
world
 still go hungry, it cannot be simply solved by the
food
 distribution. What is more, developed countries should share production techniques and
last
 technologies, knowledge and experience with less developed ones.
As a result
, the investments will be worth it, because it helps to create new markets, increase the goods supply and the
world
 society as a whole will benefit because the modern
world
 is highly interconnected. In conclusion, unfortunately, in spite of the all that technologies people have nowadays, there are still places in the
world
 where famine is not so rare, but only multilateral cooperation of developing and developed countries can solve
this
problem
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inequality
  • distribution
  • access to resources
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • political factors
  • economic factors
  • agricultural practices
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • population growth
  • education
  • knowledge
  • food waste
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