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Space exploration is good for other technologies, but others say it is better to spend money on other things. Discuss both sides, and give your own opinion.

#space #exploration #technologies #money
Some people believe that universe inspection directly influences the technological developments of other aspects.
However
, others do not agree with
this
 statement, and they argue that there more urgent needs to be spent on the planet.
Although
 exploring the solar system may bring us technological progress, I believe that the taxpayer's money has to spend on preventing environmental damage.
First
 and foremost, many technologies which people have been using these days we have gained from universe technologies, and it will be continued in order to obtain more technological success in our social life.
In other words
, cash which was spent on galaxy research assists to invent most technological reforms that have been practising in the health care organization, navigation system, mass media, and other spheres that are vital in everyday life. To illustrate, the development of cosmos technologies has given us magnetic resonance imaging, MRI, which can be used to help diagnose or monitor treatment for a variety of diseases and
this
 technology saves the lives of millions of individuals every year. These technologies had not occurred if governments would not have spent a lot of funds on universe study.
Therefore
, spending billions of US dollars to explore space may be beneficial in many aspects of life.
On the other hand
, from the other point of view, our globe is in a danger because of global warming. I mean that these days the temperature of the planet has been rising 3 Calcium degrees every year because of air pollution, deforestation, ocean pollution. I believe that dollars in which spending on the solar system should be redirected in order to tackle environmental problems.
For instance
, if governments spend taxpayer's funds to create technologies that can absorb carbon dioxide from the air which is the main cause of global warming, we will protect our globe. If authorities did not spend a lot of cash on new technologies that clean air from pollutants, we would lose the climate battle in the near future. In conclusion, despite authorities spend a significant amount of currency on the development of universal technologies arguing that it is beneficial for other improvements, I believe that funds must be spent to solve global warming immediately as it is better to save our mother globe
instead
 of exploring a new one.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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