governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. to what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement

It is often argued that the authorities should invest more funds on railways construction
instead
of building roads. I strongly
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this
notion because trains are more affordable and can
also
reduce
traffic
jams in major cities.
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, enough access and
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if train service would significantly make transportation cheaper when
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to buses.
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this
would go a long way to minimize the cost of transportation in big cities which have raised huge concerns over the past few years.
For instance
, I usually spend 1000 daily if I use the road;
however
, I would only pay half the amount if I travel by rail. Clearly, more railways
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that the public does not waste more
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half of their monthly salary on transport fairs alone.
Therefore
, the government should strive to make
this
means of transportation easily accessible to the public.
Secondly
,
traffic
congestion will be drastically reduced if most folks travel by train. Due to the fact that
,
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it
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more passengers when compared to the number a car will convey.
For example
, the level of
traffic
jams in Rivers state has been obviously declined
owing
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to the recent law introduced by the state
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which mandates individuals to make use of the railway
instead
of the road. Evidently,
this
has reduced the heavy build-up of
traffic
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by the River state residents.
Thus
, authorities must focus more attention on the construction of more
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as it makes life more
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for the public. In conclusion, it is commonly presumed that the authorities should channel more money into ensuring
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vailability of
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other than roads. I completely agree with
this
idea because it makes transport cheaper as well as, mitigates massive
traffic
congestions encountered in most cities recently.
Hence
, they would certainly kill two birds with a stone as they can
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two major problems faced by the citizens with one solution.
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