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Increasing petrol prices is the best way to protect the environment? To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is clear that the world is facing many environmental problems. Some people suggest that the optimal way to solve these problems is raising the prices of
petrol
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. In my opinion,
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 measure is ineffective and there are much better ways to protect the
environment
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.
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 of all, making fuel more expensive simply will not work. In the past,
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 prices had increased significantly,
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, it did not have any effect on fuel consumption: people still bought and drove their own vehicles, and factories still increased their production and released more and more pollutants.
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, fuel consumption is just one of the many activities that cause pollution.
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, deforestation, the use of plastic and the huge amount of domestic waste all contaminate the
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. Increasing the prices of
petrol
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 is unlikely to have any impact on these factors, and
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 it cannot be considered the best way to protect the
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, there are much better solutions to environmental problems. One of them is investing in green technology. By making eco-friendly sources of energy more available and affordable, we can greatly reduce our impact on the
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. Another measure is educating the public on the importance of sustainable living. Ordinary people do a variety of things every day that harm the
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, and if all of us were more conscious of
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 negative impact that we have on the planet, we could make a huge difference to environmental issues. In conclusion, increasing the prices of
petrol
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 is not a good way to protect the
environment
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, and other measures should be considered.
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