In some countries the government promotes public transport as the primary means of transportation, and discourages private vehicle ownership. Do disadvantages of this situation outweigh the advantages?

Public transport is often perceived to be a more appropriate alternative
for
Change preposition
to
show examples
car
use by the government in some countries. I believe that despite the apparent benefits of
this
approach
such
as reducing the intensity of traffic and mitigating the negative impact on the environment, there are some indisputable disadvantages relating to inconveniences of using the municipal transport system and even certain health risks. Admittedly, there are some possible benefits to the development of an urban transport system
instead
of using private cars.
Firstly
, it may reduce traffic congestion, especially during rush hours.
Thus
this
can help in the
certain
Correct word choice
apply
show examples
enhancement of the urban quality of life
as
Change preposition
by
show examples
reducing not only traffic noise but
also
car
accidents, but with a well-developed urban infrastructure,
such
problems will not arise anyway.
Secondly
, it is often assumed that on no account should the influence of cars' exhaust gases on the environment be ignored.
This
is because
car
use causes an increase in
emission
Correct article usage
the emission
show examples
of toxic and harmful health substances, which, among other things, contribute to global warming, smog, and acid precipitation.
However
,
according to
the United States Environmental Protection Agency, transportation produces only 28% of Greenhouse Gases,
whereas
electricity production and industry
contributes
Correct subject-verb agreement
contribute
show examples
50% of total Global Manmade Greenhouse Gases. they take the first steps in learning how to manage money. Many older children,
for instance
, have a part-time job in order to save for something they would
otherwise
be unable to afford. Understanding money management,
therefore
, may be useful when, as adults, they will potentially need to balance their finances.
car
use
it
Correct pronoun usage
apply
show examples
has the potential to bring more drawbacks
due to
many inconveniences of using to society. the inconvenience and health risks
bringing
Wrong verb form
brought
show examples
by
this
approach will be greater for local residents I think that it can bring about more problems for children compared to any benefits it might bring.
Negative
Add an article
The negative
A negative
show examples
effect of perceived transportation problems on social activities of elderly people living in a small town far from the nearest train station
Submitted by olya.chalova on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • public transport
  • commute
  • carbon emissions
  • economical
  • maintenance
  • overcrowding
  • socio-economic group
  • infrastructure
  • reliability
  • flexibility
  • public policy
  • sustainability
  • personal mobility
What to do next:
Look at other essays: