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People prefer to shop from super markets than local. What are the reason behind it.

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 the list.
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 task would take us almost half a day to complete. After the rise of
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 in my current city, my parents have been drawn towards shopping from the
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 as it's convenient, efficient and saves
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 of time. Everything is available under one roof! The week is busy, hectic and tiresome for many due to work, purchasing weekly supplies is a mundane activity, it becomes even more tiresome if one has to go from one place to another in order to gather supplies.
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 is preferred. The question that remains unanswered is whether the produce available at the local store much fresher than the supermarket? In my opinion, the reason for opting for a supermarket over a local store is only out of sheer convenience so that people can have some time back to themselves.
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