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Government investment in the arts, such as music and theatre, is a waste of money. Government must invest this money in public services instead. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

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Nowadays the amount of
energy
 from nuclear
power
 accounts for a big proportion of total
energy
 consumed in the world.
However
, I do not think its benefits are not far bigger than its disadvantages. Among people, there is the opinion that the
energy
 of nuclear
power
 gives benefits to our society.
Firstly
, it does not produce pollutants. Compared to the process of using fossil fuel, utilizing nuclear
power
 emits far fewer air pollutants which can cause global warming.
Secondly
, the method of using nuclear
power
 is cost-effective. Since nuclear
power
 needs tiny materials
instead
 of oil and coal, using nuclear
power
 can reduce operating expenses. Despite the advantages above, I believe there are more disadvantages to using nuclear
power
.
First
 of all, radioactive disposal from nuclear stations cannot be removed completely. The process to generate
energy
 in nuclear stations entails radioactive waste which is not decomposed permanently.
Furthermore
,
this
 waste should be strictly separated from people and the natural environment due to its danger.
Thus
, places storing the waste are needed, which means that people will lose natural environments if they continue to use nuclear
power
. The
second
 reason is that damage would be extremely dangerous if the station breaks down. There were several cases that we can confirm how dangerous the influence of accidents was. In these accidents, a lot of casualties have happened, and places have been restored yet.
In addition
, anyone, even governments, cannot make sure that the same accident will not happen until now. In conclusion, I think that cost-saving and less pollutant of using nuclear
power
 do not outweigh its hazard and disposal.
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