Punishment is a good way to address the behavioural problem in children. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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some difficulties during the process of becoming mature and conscious. I fully agree that the best option to direct a child's upbringing to the right way is to create
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ystem of penalties. It is
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youngsters learn better from experience. Situations when parents
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is pleasant show bonds between actions and consequences.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • address
  • behavioral problems
  • effective
  • fear
  • deter
  • negative behaviors
  • reinforce
  • boundaries
  • consequences
  • last resort
  • fair
  • appropriate
  • positive reinforcement
  • open communication
  • underlying issues
  • root causes
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