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Some people think that the best way to solve environmental problems is to increase the price of fuel for cars and other vehicles. Do you agree or disagree?

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In modern life, the world is facing with
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global environmental issues. There are many solutions
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re given to cope with those problems, one of them is the price of
fuel
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 should be raised. Some people think that solution is an
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 way to solve environmental issues;
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, from my perspective, I strongly disagree for
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ollowing reasons. Obviously, the higher tax on petrol is likely to create minimal impacts upon minimizing the negative effects of pollution. The constant demands for travelling and industrial activities prove the ineffectiveness in that given policy.
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, Vietnam’s petrol prices increased sharply;
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, there is no sign of reduction
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 the traffic on the roads.
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, the high petrol price could easily trigger off a wave of social disagreement and protests. It means whilst people continue using traffics to travel and industries
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 to manufacture constantly; increase in
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 affects the family economic well-being and factories’ revenue. The nature of global environmental issues is what kinds of
fuel
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 are used
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 of the cost of
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;
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, the effective solution is to change usages and policy in using
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Decrease
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 in CO2 emissions to
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nvironment is to lower the demands on fossil
fuel
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. Based on
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O2 cycle, the biofuel namely
bio diesel
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biodiesel
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, bio petro, produced from agricultural and crops scrap, play a crucial role in decrease the dependencies of fossil
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.
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,
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 of using fossil
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 in thermal electrical factories, the renewable should be taken adequate considerations to decrease the negative impacts
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 fossil
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. Taking energy harvesting projects as an example, Solar harvesting systems have been invested since 2010 in Binh Thuan, Vietnam; these systems
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 a considerable amount of energy to national the electrical power grid. The global environmental problems should require serious considerations not only from government but
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 from any citizens. These evidentiary supports, I mentioned above, show the less
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 in heightening the price of
fuel
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 to cope with those issues. Individuals and governments should figure out other extremely practical solutions
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 of rising in the
fuel
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 tax.
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