Nowadays a large amount of advertising aimed at children should be banned because of the negative effects. To what extent do you agree or disagree

In the present world, many promotion

advertisements

targeting

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youngsters which

bring

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adverse

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impact on them. It is argued that those clips should not be accessible to

children

. I totally

agreed

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that teenagers are better to stay away

to

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from

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those

advertisements

.

Firstly

, most of the promoting videos

are

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mainly

focusing

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focus

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on the selling points of their products and

ignoring

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ignore

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the dark sides that might negatively affect

children

's development.

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, there are some Candies selling organic ingredients

properly

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hidden

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that

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fact that those candies

having

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high sugar or sodium per piece.

This

misleading message, which

commonly

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used in advertising,

attract

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attracts

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youngsters to consume, and

then

unhealthy goods might affect

the

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growth and health condition

of

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apply

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them

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. Since young ages still have not acquired enough knowledge to distinguish the truth,

children

's advertising should be banned.

Secondly

, the technique applied to

advertisements

might build up the wrong concept for

the

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young ages. Businessmen usually

combined

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their products with fabulous images and concepts to boost sales.

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,

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the toys

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toys

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business will combine their goods with materialistic and high social status as an attractive point to

tracker

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customers'

emotion

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emotions

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to buy. Since

children

are

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can

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easily

accessed

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to

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apply

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those

promotion

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promotional

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clips on TV, kids learn through these

association

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associations

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from the

advertisements

and

build-up

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the wrong concept easily.

This

is harmful to the

children

by altering their proper attitude and manner that learnt from school. In conclusion,

advertisements

for

children

should be carefully regulated to prevent the kids

frommisunderstand

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from misunderstanding

the messages. Parents

also

play an essential role as a firewall to ensure their

children

free

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are free

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from the numerous harmful messages.