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Some people think that government should give financial support to creative artists such as painters and musicians. Other believe that creative artists should be funded by alternative sources. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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The table reveals the admissions of students at Brighton co-ed school in the span of 20 years. Overall, it can be seen that the trends of admission, male's
percentage
 and overseas students were upward, whereas other they were downward for other sectors. It is important to note that there was a dramatic increase in
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 enrollment sector. It was only 800 students in the initial year (1990) as compared to 3400 of 2010. It almost increased
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400%. The enrollment number inclined gradually in the 10
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 of span.
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, in 1990, there
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 no
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 students in the school but, it rose greatly in the following year and
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 the end of 2010 it reached
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a quarter.
On the other hand
, the
percentage
 of students, who were coming from EU countries declined minimally till 2010. They were 76% against 100% of 1990. The
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 of male and female students were almost
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ame in 1990.
However
, the ratio of women started decreasing in 2000 and fell till 2010. It dropped almost 48% to 44% in 2000 and
then
 39% in 2010. On the flip side, men’ rate escalated greatly in 2000 and it reached to the peak in 2010 with 61% enrollment. The students, who
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 in 5 miles radius of Brighton and Hove declined gradually over the period.
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 of abroad students went up in 20 years.
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