Companies should provide sports and social facilities for local communities To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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modern era,

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people are living

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ery hectic life and relaxation is very essential for everyone. Some people believe that companies must have to provide game and social facilities to the local residences so they can relax

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properly. I personally think that by doing

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companies can easily support locality.

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them

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cultural and game facilities. To commence with, with the help of

sports people

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can

easlily

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maintain

their fitness.

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, strong bonding and team

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can be developed by

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in the locals and they can live with

eachother

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each other

comfortably.

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, when everyone

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ecahother

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in social function at that time they can easily share their problems with others and it improves

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trong relationship between them.

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people are living

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appy lifestyle only because of the good connection and relations with their locality. Mainly, if

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ompany provides

this

thing to the community

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they can easily feel safe and understand the importance of

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unity and

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will be the biggest achievement for them.

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, if industries are providing

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things

then

they must have to spend

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xtra money and it will

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their profit ratio. Apart from

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, they will not get any money return if they

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sponsor

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thing to the native communities.

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erits of

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facilities are much more than demerits. Due to

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reason, the

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government

must have to encourage every

companies

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for

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. Cultural identity can be

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built by

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little effort and

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is very profitable for the

generation. To sunning up, for the better future of the local community

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every company must have to sponsor

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type of

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things

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to them without any cost and I completely agree with it. Even it is

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beneficial for the society as well as for the country.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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