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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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In the contemporary era, moving to other countries for getting education, job, and better career has become a privilege trend. But the different
language
 from his/her own
country
 could create a problem of less socialise and doing the tasks inappropriate. I fully agree with the statement. The following paragraphs would elucidate the effect of the foreign
language
.
Firstly
, due to the
language
 differentiate, It is hard for ones to communicate with the native people of the
country
 that could lead an introvert and less number of friends. it can be seen that a person who cannot speak the foreign
language
 consider himself less efficient and fear to connect somebody for building the relationship.
For example
- one of my friends who went to Australia to pursue his diploma, could not make even a single friend because of his fears of mistake in speaking the
language
.
Thus
, living in another
country
 would likely to lead less socialize.
Secondly
, foreign culture and rules are
also
 not similar to one's home
country
 that might be the reason for performing things with difficulties. The traditions of the new
country
 could lead to someone to adjust him/herself according to the situation difficult and make his practical life worse.
For Instance
- If someone goes to foreign and
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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