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In many countries today, crime novels and tv crimes dramas are becoming more and more popular. Why do you think these books and tv shows are popular? What is your opinion of crime fiction tv crime dramas?

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Today's abruptly expanding world is facing more and more crimes in different ways than it has ever faced in past.The
literatures
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literature
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 regarding illegal works and the mainstream media programmes showing the
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 thrillers are becoming increasingly famous
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 in many parts of the world.
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 explain the detrimental effects of these type of shows being shown on television. Yes,people always search for some reality in stories and shows,
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 they look for
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something
 that matches with their own stories happening all around them.Not surprisingly the novelists and the directors of different
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 shows are now well aware of their sales and
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;keeping that in mind they focus more on the
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 crimes taking place here and there.
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,their contents are so realistic and thrilling with additional factitious spice and twists poured by the authors as much as they can to attract their targeted group of readers and viewers.Overall,commercialism being the main theme they are creating any kind of arts;be it a novel or a
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 show. The consequences of the increasing
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 of
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crime
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 dramas are not sometimes soothing.Having an
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adventurous
 journey with the show may give birth to incessant desire to experience commission of the same kind of
crime
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 in subconscious minds of the teenagers often.
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,the minors may drown themselves in the sea of knaveries unknowingly as a game.Henceforth,in future life
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they can be habituated to those unethical acts which were tools of play at
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ender age.
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,boys and girls may become addicted to drugs which they someday started
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nly o have the taste once. The spiking
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 of
crime
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 novels and
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 shows is alarming.
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 must be some monitoring body who will
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approve
 the eligibilities of these to be published or to be shown
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tv
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.As people want more entertainment they are inclining more to
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 of works.In my opinion,
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 fiction
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 dramas are doing more harm silently to the society by sawing seeds of crimes in the tender minds of the teenagers which will grow into big trees of crimes in future.
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