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The media pays too much attention to the lives and relationships of celebrities such as actors, singers or footballers. They should spend more time reporting the lives of ordinary people instead. To what extend to you agree or disagree?

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The social media plays a special role in the lives and relationships of famous people but they
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 have to report the living style of intermediate class people.I believe that they have to report about intermediate class people that how they are spending their lives. On one side,our media medium have to report the coverage of ordinary community that how they are spending their lives.Their source of income is very low they have to manage their living expenses and other things but media channels did not pay attention to the intermediate community because they did not get any kind of rating.Social media site
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 want to express their feels throughout the world. On another side of an argument, media channels play a significant role in our society.Their
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 preferences are that they broadcast the news of famous people
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 as cricketer,singer,actor and many more.Durning these broadcast their means has increased their rating and earn bundles of money.They coverage news for an advertisement of their tunnel as well.
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 week one news route broadcast the news of a foreign actor.The rating of the news avenue was increased gradually high.\ In the
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, media and other social media apps
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 as Facebook and many more have to keep an eye on the medium class of people
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 of famous people because
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opular community did not need any kind of fame.I believed that the media has to keep proper attention to ordinary people because they need attention.
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