Some people believe that students should be taught international news as a subject at school. Others feel that this would be a waste of valuable school time. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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tudent need to be trained about international current affairs or it just time-consuming futility if they are discussing
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its at institutional education. In my own perspective, approaching to the news not only a radical and
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rights, which has been officially declared and affirmed in human rights.
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re unsuitable to adolescent.
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ssue and cast light on it. On the one side, when students are able to catch up with the official daily news on TV and e-newspaper, which have been censored strictly and fit up with their age group.
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tep into a small scale to reduce the particular issue. Global warming,
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, is closely correlated to the survival of humanity. Throughout creating more online campaign,
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to propaganda about the consequence of global warming towards human beings and natural habitat, along with raise funds, students can support national botanical institutions or zoos to gain more budgets as well as financial aids to maintain and rescue endangered species on the verge of extinction. On the flip side, some kind of macro and micro fields
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to those kinds of bad news for a long time can be damage and bear in their mind a detrimental impact and exert/create negative emotions and brutal views about world and life.
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, in educational terms, children should be stimulated to take part in more outdoor and social activities, which help them improving and enhancing social interaction, gaining and gathering more academic, practical knowledge and energetic to adapt with future career and job market. To recapitulate, based on the benefits of international bulletins up-to-date, students can be gathered useful information to serve their study and career as well as
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conduct flexibility postures and gestures without any hesitation under no circumstances.
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for the time being, it should be censored and carefully selected to suitable with youngsters.
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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
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  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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