Some people believe that students should be taught international news as a subject at school. Others feel that this would be a waste of valuable school time. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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There has long been several confront comments about whether should

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tudent need to be trained about international current affairs or it just time-consuming futility if they are discussing

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its at institutional education. In my own perspective, approaching to the news not only a radical and

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rights, which has been officially declared and affirmed in human rights.

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, it could be limit to some extent cause some pieces of news or information

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re unsuitable to adolescent.

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ssue and cast light on it. On the one side, when students are able to catch up with the official daily news on TV and e-newspaper, which have been censored strictly and fit up with their age group.

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is one of the most utility and confident sources of information toward learning and entertaining in the eye of parentals’.

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tep into a small scale to reduce the particular issue. Global warming,

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, is closely correlated to the survival of humanity. Throughout creating more online campaign,

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to propaganda about the consequence of global warming towards human beings and natural habitat, along with raise funds, students can support national botanical institutions or zoos to gain more budgets as well as financial aids to maintain and rescue endangered species on the verge of extinction. On the flip side, some kind of macro and micro fields

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as economy, diplomacy, philosophy, politics are overwhelming the awareness ability and knowledge with the innocent mindset of pupils.

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to those kinds of bad news for a long time can be damage and bear in their mind a detrimental impact and exert/create negative emotions and brutal views about world and life.

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, in educational terms, children should be stimulated to take part in more outdoor and social activities, which help them improving and enhancing social interaction, gaining and gathering more academic, practical knowledge and energetic to adapt with future career and job market. To recapitulate, based on the benefits of international bulletins up-to-date, students can be gathered useful information to serve their study and career as well as

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conduct flexibility postures and gestures without any hesitation under no circumstances.

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for the time being, it should be censored and carefully selected to suitable with youngsters.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
12Grammar mistakes
 

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Some people believe that students should be taught international news as a subject at school. Others feel that this would be a waste of valuable school time. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Include an introduction and conclusion

Some people say that parents have the most important role in a child's development. However, others argue that other things like television or friends have the most siginificant influence. Discuss both views and opine.

In some countries, owning a home is more important rather than renting one. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

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