There has been a dramatic growth in the number of people studying at universities in the last few decades. While some people see this as a positive trend which raises the general level of education within the community, others fear that it is lowering the quality of education. What are the advantages and disadvantages of the increase in student numbers at university?

Although
there was a growth in the numbers of students attending universities, which increased the standard of education in the
community
, others think it might hurt its quality. The increase
of
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students going to universities could benefit but
also
are drawbacks to be taken into account.
Firstly
, high numbers of attendants in the universities would create many students with the same major, which will eventually cause a problem hiring in the
community
.
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, accepting
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igh rate of students for
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the
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aw will create many lawyers but not all of them will have a job.
Secondly
, it could be difficult to maintain a lot of students in classrooms, the staff could have an issue giving attention to a great number of students in
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lass. Even though the increase of jobs requirement and
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igh number in the classrooms are inevitable, they could be eliminated to some extent with these benefits.
On the other hand
, it would benefit when it comes to increasing the level of education in the
community
,
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more students to graduate from universities will affect the
community
positively in a way that will affect the crime rates, unemployment and poverty and I support
this
idea.
For example
, Adam is an average man that only needs a
first
degree to get a job as a teacher, as a consequence of attending the university Adam is capable of working, contributing to the
community
and providing for his family. I believe
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example speaks volumes about how the high numbers of students in universities matter in the modern world. In conclusion, raising the level of education and having the opportunity to work and provide can be advantageous,
however
it could
also
be an issue when it comes to employment and numerous numbers of students in classrooms.
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