Some people like to spend their leisure time with their colleagues while others prefer to keep their private life separate from their work life. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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People have contrasting views, whether they should spend their past
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with co-workers or keep their personal life away from them. In my opinion, it is better to discrete personal and professional aspects;
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essay will discuss both views. On the one hand, sharing personal aspects with office-mates promotes corporate rivalry. A workplace is a place of competition, where fellow workers can create conspiracies if anyone exclusively spends his free
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with them; because, that person might share his hidden information with them in the emotional moments, which could have negative impacts on his career if the management is notified. It would not be a surprising thing if any co-worker shares these secrets with the authority to clear the path of promotion.
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, it is better to keep leisure separate.
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, recently an executive of a bank lost his job for travelling outside of the city as it was restricted from the bank during the pandemic situation; the information was reported to the human resource department via his colleagues.
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, accompanying with co-workers extensively enhances the bonding. While people spend more
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together, it
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usually
creates an emotional attachment among them.
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to be respectful and
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each other, which might
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productivity.
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, it has been seen that having exclusive relation with
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colleagues
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, people should limit their
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for office mates, because they are required to socialize with their family, friends and relative
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to balance their life.
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, employees spend long hours of a day with colleagues at work-station. In conclusion,
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some people prioritize to pass their leisure with co-workers, I think it is secured to spend few
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because work-mates could prove dangerous for career progression.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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