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It is sometimes thought that people who travel outside of their own country are more tolerant and understanding of others. To what extent do you agree?

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 of a person may change due to the different experiences. Some people hold that travelling overseas is one of the reasons
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 becoming more open-minded and less xenophobic.
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 it is obviously personal and it depends on
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someone's attitude I admit that there are many arguments proving that statement.
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, going abroad, especially visiting different continents, is the perfect way to become familiar with other cultures. Societal traditions and customs are
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ignificant part of
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ountry's heritage and it is important yo respect and understand them.
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, for many people
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it might be shocking but in India
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it is forbidden to eat beef as Hindus worship cows. Seeing
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ariety of lifestyles, not only make us more understanding
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 it can help us confront some damaging stereotypes.
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, travelling can be a great lesson of humility. People often tend to forget that other races, ethnicities and languages exist and they can feel superior to others. Being surrounded by new nationalities might remind us of it.
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 reinforce our fears and intolerance. During our trip, we are likely to meet somebody who
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 misconceptions.
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, these situations are rare and it is crucial to remember that generalizations are often hurtful and one person's behaviour
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 not prove prejudice's truth. To conclude, I believe that travelling teaches us generally tolerance and understanding. Simple witnessing different customs is profitable. Even though we may experience unpleasant situations, we need to keep in mind that one person's action cannot speak about
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