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2. It was suggested that everyone in the world wants to own a car, a TV and a fridge. Do you think the disadvantages of such a development outweigh advantages?

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iving.I believe that drawbacks are not advanced to advantages.I have to use the thing in a balanced way.There are pros and cons as well. On one side,modern machinery is advanced from automation.There are many necessary things for living as
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ar,TV,machinery gadgets and many more.Car is used as transportation or to transfer goods from one place to another place.Nowadays, there are self-driving cars.TV is an advanced form of machinery.By watching the TV we can improve our mind and mental approach.It provides
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arge number of information throughout the world.If we are sitting in our room we can get all kinds of news.The fridge is used to keeps the food items.We can even store our food for
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iving.If we talk about the past at that time there was no fridge present at that time public feels problem to store food but now it is so much simple. On another side,we have to use things in proper order.If we use an access amount of automobiles it can make the environment polluted.It causes a great effect on the human being as fever,cough,irritation in the eye.A famous saying is that Access of everything is bad.The young generations which are using technology gadgets in ample amount these can effect in their studies and they do not improve.It can have a bad effect on the eye and cause a headache as well.Their parents have to keep a proper eye on their children. In the
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,technologies have given many advantages in numerous ways.It helps as to improves our self But it has their demerits as well.I believe that if we handle the things in a proper way it cannot harms us.
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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