Some people believe that visitors to other country should follow local customs and behavior. Others disagree and think that the host country should welcome cultural differences. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

In today's modernization, the trend of travelling to different places experiencing various lifestyle is increasing. It is often argued that local customs and
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must be followed by the tourist visiting
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another country, whilst counter that they should be welcomed warmly by the local people. As both viewpoints have merits, I tend to believe that the difference between
culture
must be welcomed for social and educational purpose.
First
of all, it is generally believed that tourist who
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to
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ew country can experience
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ew environment.
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, they get an opportunity to enhance their knowledge in terms of both socially and educationally. One clear example is Australia where thousands of people visit either for
further
studies or exploring. In my experience, the one who
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to Australia enjoys Australian
culture
.
Therefore
they choose their living style to cope with the environment.
On the other hand
, people who oppose
this
view feel that
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ecipient country should respect and greet tourist despite
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the differences in
culture
.
This
is to say that local people should adjust, learn something new and be friendly with the way tourists behave. The fact of
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changing lifestyle and
behavior
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illustrates that they are coping along with the foreigner who posses different
culture
and
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.
Consequently
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the majority of Nepali are changing their preferences in terms of clothing,
fooding
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and behaving, etc. Taking everything into consideration, it is clear that some travellers
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to explore and behaves
accordingly
with
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nature, while others prefer to welcome warmly
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the differences in
culture
.
Therefore
, I strongly believe that local people should experience as well as understand
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arious
culture
of travellers.
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