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These days, problems with pollution are becoming worse, particularly in large cities. What are the reasons for this and how can this be solved? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays
mega cities
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megacities
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 are more polluted than before,which causes lots of problems.The growth in the
number
 of urban
duwellers
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dwellers
 due to migration ,and
also
increse
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increase
 in the
number
 of industrial activities,cause some issues,and governments should take some steps to solve them. There are several reasons why the amount of air
pollution
 have increased .
firstly
 most of
r
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ural
duwellers
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dwellers
 have immigrated in order to meet a better quality of life
such
 as having decent universities and up-to-date recreational facilities.
Such
 growth in population
result
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 in rising the
number
 of vehicles and human activities.
For instance
,statistics show that one car will be used more in exchange for every 5 migrants.
In addition
,the
number
 of factories is increasing due to industrial evolution which is one of the primary
source
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 of CO2 emission.
As a result
,owing to
increse
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increase
 in the human and
industry related
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industry-related
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 activities,the problems with
pollution
 are going to be worse than ever. To solve the mentioned problems government should encourage people to live in
c
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ountryside and impose some incentives to business owners to rebuild their firm out of cities.
For example
,
regims
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regimes
regions
 should reduce taxes in small cities in order to persuade urban residents to move to
such
 areas which will lead to population distribution.Beside states can sale fields ,which are located out of big towns, with low prices,so as to encourage factory owners to relocate sources of air
pollution
. To conclude,people and businesses are the main reasons for
pollution
 and unless the government take some steps,increased amount of contamination in air will surge.
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